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So, did something a little bit different. Usually the only writing I do is for the "Sentry of Pricom", but I had an idea for a story that I really wanted to put to paper.
This overall story was inspired by this picture I found on Twitter of a "mail delivery themed" photo shoot: sta.sh/0pnykmvbpqv
Sorry it's a bit lengthy, hopefully this won't deter too many people from reading. As usual, all critique is welcome.
UPDATE: Felt the need to read this again, and well, found a lot I didn't like. So I spent a good 3 hours working on edits. Namely just changing the writing at certain parts that killed the flow, along with a few additions and redundancy removals. Hope you enjoy.
This overall story was inspired by this picture I found on Twitter of a "mail delivery themed" photo shoot: sta.sh/0pnykmvbpqv
Sorry it's a bit lengthy, hopefully this won't deter too many people from reading. As usual, all critique is welcome.
UPDATE: Felt the need to read this again, and well, found a lot I didn't like. So I spent a good 3 hours working on edits. Namely just changing the writing at certain parts that killed the flow, along with a few additions and redundancy removals. Hope you enjoy.
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Great story! Loved the parts where the hero is exploring the girl's body, beautiful work! Thanks for sharing it.